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Help needed in reframing a sentence. - (Sep/21/2012 )

I am writing my first paper about neural activation but i am stuck at a sentence and i want to reframe it so that it looks better.
The sentence is:
''A pair of fish was divided by a one sided see through mirror wherein a big fish could see a small fish in the first tank followed by a small fish seeing a big fish in the second tank and lastly a big fish seeing a small fish in the last tank for five minutes before interaction''

Can someone help me reframe this sentence? Or do you think is the sentence correct? I would like to make it short

-Mad researcher-

Sorry but I'm lost. You've got three different set ups? Because the last one sounds the same as the first one?

And do you mean one-way mirror?

"Pairs of fish were placed into tanks and separated by a one-way mirror for 5 minutes prior to recording interactions. Set ups were such that either only the big fish could see the small fish, or vice versa"

And I think it would be helpful to include a diagram (that's what I would do :) )

-leelee-

leelee on Fri Sep 21 12:13:47 2012 said:


Sorry but I'm lost. You've got three different set ups? Because the last one sounds the same as the first one?

And do you mean one-way mirror?

"Pairs of fish were placed into tanks and separated by a one-way mirror for 5 minutes prior to recording interactions. Set ups were such that either only the big fish could see the small fish, or vice versa"

And I think it would be helpful to include a diagram (that's what I would do )


Many thanks for your reply.
Yes, the setup in 1st tank is similar to tank 3. Just that the aquarium changes :)
I have included a diagram also to make it clear. i just wanted to reduce the length of the sentence because nobody likes to read such a big sentence and then get confused :P

-Mad researcher-